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[凌辱虐情] 【便器柔柔】

本主题由 System 于 2024-5-10 05:00 解除限时高亮
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这个文章写的非常好,那种便器的描写很到位,就是少了点对男主知道后的描写,直接就收尾了有点意犹未尽,也可能是因为楼主前面写的太精彩了,显得这个收尾没有特别出彩,就比如男主在找女主的时候还可以写些故事,更扭曲一些的,既然都写便器绿文了,完全可以再放开一些,当然这篇文章是非常优秀的,我只是提一些建议,楼主的描写还是很到位的,对于心理的把握也很好
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